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Cries Of The Little One

by snowflakes
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"This is not enough!" The mother yelled and threw the card on the table roughly, she walks away with disappointment painting her every action. The little boy could not do a thing except to watch her mother's disappearing silhoutte. Carefully, he picked the card where his grades were printed on and made his way to his room. As the door clicked close, he sat beside the door while hugging his knees closer to him. The lad picked up the card where a few vertical lines of numbers were printed on it. His teacher said it was his grades and he got very good results in every subject. "I don't understand why mom became sad." He gulped down the lump forming on his throat, "Was it because of this numbers on the paper?" He lifted the card once again.

A few tears escape his doe eyes. "I made mother sad again. I don't want to do it anymore. But, I don't know how to make her happy" 

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Iefa_San  on says about chapter 1:
Haha... Is this drabbles somehow what your heart wants? LOL... Going into a house then found a door that leads to a lot of cutie guys? XD Well, if you found the house, don't forget to call me! XD

Iefa_San  on says about chapter 2:
Wow.. this is interesting.. Nicely done!

coffeeplease  on says:
oh my gosh write more please <33

EmptyPromises  on says about chapter 6:
...This is so heartbreaking. The little boy doesn't know where his "flaw" lies (even if he has tried his best and it can't be really called a flaw) and having been told that's it not enough. And he just sees the disappointment in his mother; he wants to do better, but he's done well already. It's sad, the way you write it, he thinks so innocently, he doesn't know that he's good. It's so innocent that it hurts...
I'm sorry I wrote all that (I never know my limit) but I just wanted to say that it's very well written.

EmptyPromises  on says about chapter 5:
I like these a lot! You write well. It's nice that you write random drabbles.. they turn out really nice. And I just need to say that I love this line "she became the darkness she was afraid of". It gives that sort of impact, you know?
(I'm not making sense)
But anyways, thanks for the story!

splash  on says:
I like the way you write; I'll stick around for your updates :)

jj_maple  on says:
Random stories sometimes turn interesting....or weird :)
please update and do you do requests?

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