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Calling yingjumeihua

by BeHappy
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Reviewer: BeHappy

 

Title (10/10pts): The title gives an impression of something deep and melancholic, and that's the vibe the reader gets from the description as well. Great title choice!

Graphics/Trailer (10/5pts): I love, love, LOVED the poster! It had, like the title, a melancholic, sad, deep, feel to it, and the background matched too. Bonus on the graphics~

Description & Foreword (15/15pts): The "You never..." structure had its desired effect. The sentences were nice and short, but affected the reader. 

Characters (10/10pts): The victim played the role of the victim, and the others respectively. You did a great job portraying how each person felt!

Plot: Is it interesting? (Yes/No): The story was interesting, but I can't really say the plot was, because I couldn't really identify a plot. The story was more of a lesson on bullying, something for the reader to learn from and relate to.

Mechanics [Grammar/Punctuation/Spelling/Syntax, etc] (20/20pts): I didn't find anything wrong with spelling or grammar. 

Flow (10/10pts): The events transitioned smoothly into one another. I really liked how you included time and place in each part of your story! In a sense, it shows how bullying was different. 

Visual things (10/10pts): Perfect sized text, perfect poster colors, perfect background colors~! :D

Ending (15/15pts): Great ending for this particular type of story! I think hitting the enter bar a couple of times at the end to help spacing would be good though, just for visual purposes. 

Bonus (5/5pts possible): LOVED the graphics!

Extra Comments/Notes/Author's Comment:

I'm sooo sorry this took so long! School's been extremely busy this year. I really enjoyed your story though! It was beautifully written. And I think perhaps a chapter or sequel regarding cyberbullying would be nice too. :D

Total: 100/100 

 

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ByungKitty  on says:
happy late birthday~ :3

snowflakes  on says:
I've request a review for my story, thank you! :)

jj_maple  on says about chapter 7:
Thanks for your review ^^
I didn't mind waiting at all.

yingjumeihua  on says:
I requested for one of my stories.

lostreader  on says about chapter 6:
omg, I don't think I ever got such high score *^*
Thank you for the review and I don't mind waiting! :D
I'm going to credit now :3

FTisland_BigBang  on says about chapter 5:
tnx! I'll try to improve it :) did I put report? @_@ I just rwalize that... Thanks again :)

lostreader  on says:
I requested :3

sleepwalker  on says about chapter 4:
No way! I've never received a score that high before LOL (probably because I rarely request reviews). Thank you for taking the time to review my story. May I ask you something? Did you think my chapters were too short?
Ah, I'm glad I could show you a different perspective on capitalization of story titles. And lol Snoopy is great xD I just found it random haha
Again, thank you for the review! I'll make sure to request in the future.

mafalda  on says:
Requested~! :D

Cremeplan42  on says about chapter 1:
Want to add another reviewer to the list? LOL. I want to apply.

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